It was an autumn day, late in the afternoon, a Tuesday, when the last murderer died. There was no official announcement. Indeed, she and her crime had been forgotten. Pancreatitis, her cause of death. Quite treatable, the cancer. Nothing could be done for the gene that predisposed her to the ugly actions of her life. She was forty-seven. In six days she would have been forty-eight. Would have.
And so she was gone. Good riddance. Yes, there would be other deaths…but no more murder. That sick twist of the primate mind had been rooted out. Like a weed it was pulled and left to dry in the sun. The weeds, some seven hundred and sixty-nine million of them, by modest estimates, were culled.
Evolution had stepped in. Humankind had evolved. From fire to wheel to electricity to nanotech, intelligence had marched on and won the day.
Her name, that last one, was Elizabeth Holt. She'd meant to kill herself after what she succeeded to do to her children and husband. Her conviction had not waned but her trembling hand and the talents of the emergency room medical staff conspired against her and her self-inflicted gunshot.
And so, as part of her sentence, her nanotech was removed. The legion of microscopic physicians were gone. There would be no more scrubbing of toxins and deep cell repair. No more close attendance to glucose levels and monitoring of the endocrine. Aging would commence again. The decay of life, the ticking clock once paused would resume. She, sick and wrong, would be gone. Tossed from the raft of humanity. And so she was.
Meanwhile, a passionless race moves and pushes things about and forward, forever unquestioning. Immortal.
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Sentenced to old age.
Nice, Eric. Like the detail.
Tricky topic, handled with novel imagination and skill. *
Thank you, Frankie and Mathew. It actually was inspired by my six year old son. He said that some day everyone will get to live forever...except bad people.
This has me thinking, wondering, wanting to know more. Love it.
Mr Laing, I often look at work and think, yes, no, that word, that line, that idea, that thing, that that, that, maybe. But, just about every time I see something of yours, I just nod, and say, "Yes. Eric." And I move along.
However, I have seen, on the twitters, you asked for some feedback, so I will stretch my meagre resources and try and find a word or two to say:
This is a great idea. And executed with your usual precision.
If I was to quibble I might say I don't like the word 'Indeed' in there, and maybe you could bridge that more smoothly with a semicolon.
[There was no official announcement; she and her crime ...]
[Quite treatable, this cancer; but nothing could be done for the gene that predisposed her to the ugly actions of her life.]
Para 2: great.
[And so, she died.]
Hm. You know, I might end it without your last para. The last para has a feel of tense shift, which I know you'll know, but it breaks the spell, if you see what I mean.
Okay. At this point, the pelting of this commenter with ripe, rotten tomatoes may begin.
Arif,
Thanks for the feedback. Food for thought. I do like the semicolon suggestion.
Cheers,
E