Her veil kept most from knowing, but not me; I knew where she hid the holes, and I could hear her cries. It takes strength to maintain the illusion of strength. It takes strength to know when not to be strong. She had run out of strength.
We used to smile when we saw the other one smile.
We used to laugh just at the sound of our laughter.
Sadness in children can be overcome by the next happy act, but there were no happy acts that could bring her back. Her veil had thickened to a hiding place.
I knew no-one was home, like when we wake in the night, and know it's almost morning without having to glance at the clock. I knew she wasn't there; I didn't need to look. When I left for work, I left her in bed, but the house was already empty.
She hadn't spoken in days.
She hadn't spoken to me for longer than that.
She was gone before her departure, and still I wonder where she went. Maybe she found the place we used to be. I like to think she's again laughing at the sound of someone's laughter.
When I came upon a smile that made me want to smile, I smiled. Soon after I heard laughter that made me want to laugh, so I laughed. Then I asked her if she'd ever been sad, and she said she had been, but only until she found reason not to be. I said me too, and knew the next happy act had happened.
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More of an exercise than anything I'll ever try to publish...
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Great closing line, Fos !
I wonder what would happen if you switched the order of the first two sections?
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Thanks, Dennis. I've been playing with order of things since this afternoon...
Three successful pieces today with long "silences"that really help shape the narrative.
Reminds me a little bit of the HUM song, "Stars" : "She's not at work / She's not in school / She's not in bed I think / I finally broke her"
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Rfbn3ieVUYU
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Enjoyed. *
I like what Gary said. The silence is the heart of this I think. Excellent. *
Awesome Foster, I love the theme of this, how it runs through. The next happy act. How humans survive. *
I love this sentiment: "She was gone before her departure, and still I wonder where she went. Maybe she found the place we used to be. I like to think she's again laughing at the sound of someone's laughter." And how this builds.*
Cues the imagination just enough... *
Yeah, I'm with Gary and John. It's what is left to the reader's imagination that makes this so fine.*
Very fine, especially the last byte. **
I like it when an exercise becomes a realized piece or story. This one is realized and mysterious and interesting to read. *