“It was all miserable: the weather, the health, the job, the relationship. everything seemed soggy and wet. I had a cold. I couldn't face one more day in the office or else. Nobody loved me or if they did, I had not met them yet.”
These were the first sentences of my 1957 novel “
Misty Moods” for which I received 1000 Pounds since the editor, who had lost her man in the war, developed a crush on me when I entered her office waving my paragraph like the flag of an unknown, brave nation. But I could never get past the beginning ... the 1960s rolled around, and throughout the decade, I had the most marvellous ideas where the story might go — never wrote them down, because I had so many ideas, you know. And I was busy building a writer's life in Camden Town. Which included reading what I had already written (the famous paragraph that had brought me a contract) to big-eyed young women looking for artsy types between the pillows of this party or that and subsequently taking said women to bed for a night or for weeks, but never longer, because I was not going to be jailed between a marriage license and a mortgage. Like so many of us, hopeful ones, hopeless ones, poets and petty penmen, who worked as bartenders, librarians, substitute teachers, anything.
Forward arrow in time ... at the end of that, I must say in hindsight, terrible period, I discovered, initially to my amazement, that I had not aged at all! When I looked in the mirror, my beard was full and black as it had always been, and my excesses had not left any trace around my eyes. My forehead was a little wrinkled from the continuous effort of thinking lasting thoughts, but these wrinkles I knew and they had been my trusty companions for many years. My body was trim and lean — only my spirit had put on weight over time.
I was looking for medical reasons at first but lacking the training (for anything, really, other than making it sound to others that I knew something that, in fact, I did not know), I got no further. Examination by specialists did not yield any new insights either — since I had not been a subject of interest to science before, no record of my state of health had been fixed, and science is nothing without record: it is, I must conclude, a human activity so dependent on fragile external memory and data as to be completely useless, at least when compared to the tangible power of spirit and the tender, but constant, pull of creativity that we feel with our whole being, not just mediated through tubes or borne away by bookishness, to rot on shelves.
So I found myself suddenly torn out of humanity because I would not age. And if I would not age, I could not fold my life up neatly near its end like old knickers, I could not die. And if I could not die, I could not look back at anything worth doing or at things undone and also worth doing in those last moments that we all anticipate unconsciously, all the time, awake or asleep. I had no longer a choice — short of suicide, my life might never end, so I had to give up nothingness and find something worth doing. This was only the beginning of my journey, the well from which my writing sprang like a yeasty fount.
Superb! And lately I find myself reading your work in your voice so it's that much better for the audio effect.
I love the free spirit of the second paragraph and how that becomes almost a burden in later times without the decision being made at the end.
Love: "My body was trim and lean — only my spirit had put on weight over time."
"so I had to give up nothingness and find something worth doing."
yep yep
Such a great read, Finnegan. The piece has a wonderful & comfortable tone. Enjoyed the video read as well.
thanks y'all for your kindness. particularly appreciated as the days get shorter still and the land lacks loveliness. @susan: i just about saved myself there (in the end)! @sam i was going for comfortable without getting too cuddly...
"I could not fold my life up neatly near its end like old knickers, I could not die." Love this character and his point of view.
thanks very much kim. yeah i am a little in love with him but at a loss what to do with that sentiment...
"A yeasty fount" Interesting possibilities in that phrase! And what a challenge, to find something worth doing without the spectre of decrepitude cracking its whip at your heels!
thank you so much, carol...aww decrepitude. dont mention it.
ha, like carol, i am stuck on the "yeasty fount" phrase. so many possiblities.
the "old knickers" line is just magnificent, finnegan
this has so much heart.
Wonderful read! This has my attention. Have you considered developing it further? I think it could be riveting if it were expanded, and the pacing slowed. I agree with David; it's got heart.
thanks david & cynthia: i like that you like that it has heart. @cynthia: will put it into one of the workshop groups...
yes, great read. i was caught from line 1, and wanted to ask the same question: any plan to return to the text, and develop it further?
you're so pushy, it's quite charming. though i dont make plans, i am very grateful for your encouragement. the problem i think lies in the felt distance to the character. there are similarities but he's rather a father, not a twin. i've not written anything else but flash on that generation but i am intrigued. thanks!
This is such a fun, easy 'prologue' with so many sparkly bits. Definitely an interesting character - you've got to develop this.
even in my own puny voice, your story is so confidently told. And then to the youtube - I swoon! Please sir, I want some more.
thanks ajay and julie, really appreciate your comments - i'll keep this character in my back pocket (he still fits) for now. @julie: really puny could be good. serial killer good.
delicious.
Oh, Finnegan....I let you read this to me via YouTube, and your voice suits the mood of this piece so well. You should seriously read books on tape for a living. This piece is breathtaking, and I identify with so much of it. So many good lines. I love: "...I was not going to be jailed between a marriage license and a mortgage."
thank you so much, katrina and meg, especially from such grand vocal (and beautiful) writers as yourselves!
I like the character too and would read on if it were to be a novel. nice line: because I was not going to be jailed between a marriage license and a mortgage...and I love the title of his novel–very amusing..