blanck (1?)
①
empty space
not black
not white
not noise
blanck
②
voices around
still blanck
blanck still
around voices
③
an eternity
passed me by
voices again
I can understand now
«Head trauma.»
«Vision centre.»
④
smell
taste
antiseptic
metallic
⑤
soft cotton
soft pillow
soft blanket
⑥
my eyes
are wide open
and i see
nothing
empty space
not black
not white
not noise
blanck
②
voices around
still blanck
blanck still
around voices
③
an eternity
passed me by
voices again
I can understand now
«Head trauma.»
«Vision centre.»
④
smell
taste
antiseptic
metallic
⑤
soft cotton
soft pillow
soft blanket
⑥
my eyes
are wide open
and i see
nothing
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Author's Note
This particular story has been drafted and begun several times, across a variety of media: prose, line drawing, animation, comics, script; all were unsuccessful.
This was published originally on Twitter and Tumblr: http://meh.passcod.name/post/58757286946/poetry-1-empty-space-not-black
This is released in the Public Domain / CC0.
Other stories by Félix Saparelli
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Moving poem. I like its lines and design and numerals as well. *
6 is my favorite.