Rio, 1946
by Erika Dreifus
Nothing in Max's nearly seventy-seven years—not 1914 and the Iron Cross that came with it, not the winter his son vanished along with all the December/January profits, not the Kristallnacht that had foreshadowed events beyond mention, not even the months Nelly had struggled day and night until the moment he watched the love of his life close her eyes one last time—nothing had prepared him for this day.
Grateful for the cold tea the Consul General had asked his secretary to serve, he studied the photograph of President Truman, and counted the stars on the flag, and even thanked God for this time beneath a ceiling fan that worked. He tried not to watch while the chief American official assigned to Rio de Janeiro examined his dossier, not even when the sound of silver slicing open Edith's most recent letter reminded him of the notes she had sent from France during the war and the photographs of the grandchild whom Max had never touched that were clipped to the thick ivory paper.
Now his daughter was an American citizen and Max wanted only the chance to board the SS Maua and disembark in New York. At the harbor he would search the crowd until he found those blue-gray eyes so like his own, and he would feel the slender arms around his tired bones, and he would say nothing until the tears dried and he would spend the rest of his days on this earth among those he loved best.
Max noticed that W. Brewster Shaw III—the name he'd discerned on a creamy framed document titled Universitas Harvardiana and dated the sixth of June 1915—had closed his dossier and seemed to be inspecting him from behind the broad brown desk.
Max flushed. "I don't wheeze every day, Your Honor. I promise to work. I'll never burden your country." In another time, in another life, such words might have seemed almost humiliating. But now, humiliation was the least of his worries.
"Don't say another word, Mr. Haguenauer." Max trembled. The Consul reached for a pen and tapped the dossier. "Your daughter's letter is enough for me."
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Lovely story, well told.
Content notwithstanding, I love the way this is written and will put the name Erika Dreifus on my list of authors to look for.
A heartbreaking yet focused and intense telescoping of a particular event and all that it means. Really well done.
Thank you all so much. I'm just getting started here on the site, and I look forward to reading your work, too!
I love historical fiction. I hope to see the novel published one day.
Erika, Great moment here. This, in particular: humiliation was the least of his worries. I look forward to reading more -
Thanks so much, Sara. And Matthew, you're making me think that perhaps I should post another excerpt or two. We shall see.
Beautiful, powerful singular moment, of one man's life from which you telescope out to the great drama of our last century, an underpinning struggle of what it is to be human, desire for connection/family/love, in the face of the growing bureaucratic, mechanistic void of modernity...that's some heavy lifting for 373 words!
That's amazing praise, Doug. Thank you so much.
This is wonderful and exciting. Many blessings -- Q
Thank you, Quenby. Apologies for my delayed response.
Oh, so beautiful. What elegant writing.
Good piece. Thank you for sharing.
Still waiting on other excerpts.
Matthew, mea culpa!