55 words #8
by Bobbi Lurie
Bright lights blind you
The flat surface of the seen
Endless expectations
In the mental hospital…
The credibility of cruelty
Beneath the surface
I, too, can be counted
The higher we die…
The stiller
Our secret
Center
Weight of faithlessness…
Mist
Of bodily
Existence
Grave expectations for the future…
“I do not
Remember
A thing”
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Powerful words and phrases, held together in a complex web of images and pre-verbal meaning beneath the surface.
"Weight of faithlessness… "
"Grave expectations for the future… "
Powerful! *
tight writing,
full of implication.
I like it. :)
"The credibility of cruelty
Beneath the surface
I, too, can be counted"
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"Mist Of bodily Existence"
this is wonderful fave
Great form here, Bobbi. I like the variation with this piece.
Well done, Bobbi. The ending punched me in the face!
One powerful image after another. The bright lights in a ward--that one will give me nightmares. Brrr. *
Powerful.