Trees.
White against the pale sky; reaching for warmth.
We follow the bumbling green lorry, and talk of:
Lyme Regis —
nearly miss the car park.
Delicate snow grass stalks the fog. A transmitter station hums, near the kissing gate.
We kiss —
cheekbones ache.
In the fields, wrapped horses blow warm air, and stare.
Ice over the valley.
A tiny robin hops in our heat.
Over the sty; two fresh mole hills and sheep shit.
A farmer ploughs worms for crows to squabble and dive.
Sheep crowd tight.
Horizon of giant pylons, hiss…
Here it is warm —
one lonely bird struggles across the sky.
Sitting on the valley wall — hot tea and ham sandwiches. A lone walker stands.
Two vans roar by.
A volley of shouts, ‘how many have you shot?'
spaniels, retrievers, and ruddy faces
In love with outdoors and
death.
A green felt hat remarks, ‘beautiful day'.
Dogs bark, pheasants run.
Pooh sticks on the bridge
I win twice and lose — once.
Green hands
wave
in freezing water.
Twelve shots …………
White feather
hangs
on a spiders hair.
Walking out of the valley, I remember the wild orchids in the spring.
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Published in Cinnamon Press 2009
How to be a poem and not a short story.
Written on a walk near where I live whilst trying not to trip over.
While I couldn't quite figure this one out (which I don't believe is always necessary) the descriptive writing was well done and carried my from one line to the next
Oh Dear! I'd be interested to know which / what was unfigureoutable.
Like this very much!
I love all the rich images here, in this not-short-story-but-poem! Favorite parts, for language and image:
cheekbones ache
tiny robin hops in our heat
green hands wave in freezing water
twelve shots (with those twelve dots!)
and then: white feather hangs on spiders hair (Love that!)