Now online at BFR – Broadside #22, “Saturated,” by Lou Freshwater.
Beautiful, sad, yet hopeful story. I like what Lou says about negative space, in her commentary.
Lou's wor is consistently fresh, realistic and quite perfectly understated with no less of an emotional impact for the precision. Wonderful story. I was there.
"wor" = "work" Gomen kudasai.
this is a beautiful "feeling" story in that it feels as well as allowing the reader to feel.
I enjoyed reading SATURATED and the author's comments about negative space. We learn in design that negative space defines the positive and tends to add to the dynamic composition.
Lori Lou is a master designer of Flash fiction.
Bittersweet story, a big small moment that the water kind of swells past and over. Leaves me with the twinge in my heart.
I completely understand the commentary about negative space. In some ways, it is the positive space. I think of the white space as the sadness or hum-drum-ness that makes the happiness so much sweeter, the anger so much more pointed. Anyway, both story and commentary though provoking. Peace...
an excellent combination of story + commentary in an outstanding setting. enjoyed this one and kept coming back...the comment on "negative space" is fascinating and has helped me explain some things to me - why some stories work and other don't for example. i'm even tempted to argue that negative space may be even more important to writing than the positive space (what can be seen). perhaps when you read a story out loud or when you illustrate it, you move between these spaces. i feel even more connected to lou now - we already shared a fascination with camus and, like sam and linda in this thread, lou is a contributor to <a href="http://kaffeinkatmandu.com">kaffe in katmandu</a>.
Beautiful, Lou.
Good story.
Wow, I haven't been around for a few days and I happened on this while looking for news of Daryl after finding Marcus' poem.
I am truly overwhelmed by all of your comments, and your continued support my work. I'm not overstating things when I say I quite literally don't know what I would do without my writer friends.
Thank you.