Pop Bottle?
by Steven Gowin
Who ever saw an open upright pop bottle on the street?
Who ever wanted to kick an open upright pop bottle seen on the street?
Who ever refrained from kicking an open upright pop bottle seen on the street because he knew the pop bottle had been left there filled with pee?
Who ever filled an empty pop bottle with pee and left it on the street full to be kicked by someone who saw an open upright pop bottle on the street?
Who ever kicked an open upright pop bottle filled with pee and left on the street?
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Author's Note
This is just a shorty... I'm not sure where it came from, but I think it has to do with growing up in the Midwest... something like that... There's some brutishness there, a rawness, but now the introduction is longer than the piece.
Haha, I like it. Fun, and funny. I used to do that... no I didn't;)
Encourages concision.
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First of all, we didn't call it pop. It was a soda bottle. And we didn't kick it because you'd lose the 2 cents deposit it was worth. See? Different values in our neck of the woods.
Fun wordplay going on here. It reminds me of that old gutter rhyme about the lady who swallowed a fly then swallowed a spider to eat the fly and so on.
Huzzah!
I did! I did! I like this though. It's got a crazy evocative "Dr Seuss on tequila" quality to it! ;-) *
"Dr. Seuss on tequila," is WAY better than anything in this little piece. Thanks Michael.
Good piece. I like the focus on questioning here. *