When her friend Jenny died, Rachel got smaller. Her bones, already curved and soft, dipped her closer to the ground. Her fingers, long-swollen with arth-er-itis, as she called it, swelled more and she could no longer get the three large rings she had always worn past her oversized knuckles. She removed her wedding band for the first and last time in seventy-one years.
Rachel's husband, Isaac, died fourteen years earlier. She mourned him, of course, but he had been sick and she had been younger. Now, relatives and friends, interchangeable in age and malady, died like dominoes, one then the other, falling in rows of blurred identities. She and Jenny kept each other distinct in their similarities. Both were child-sized with ashy blonde pageboy haircuts and wore fashionable costume jewelry purchased by their daughters-in-law. Though both in their early nineties, they referred to each other as “best friend,” an endearment neither had used since high school.
Rachel and Jenny were popular at the independent living home where their children had placed them, safe and separate, in expensive, lovely apartments sparsely decorated with things salvaged from the places where they had raised those children.
“Everyone wants to sit at our table at lunch,” Rachel complained to her two sons, delighted. She had resisted the move from Pittsburgh to Los Angeles. The months before Jenny arrived from Chicago were punishing. Jenny's presence quieted Rachel's complaints and evoked a sweetness like newly ripened fruit. The transformation in their domineering, sour mother revised her children's memories of their childhoods.
Jenny had an excellent walker with wheels, rather than one of the unwieldy contraptions most still used to clunk slowly along the extra-wide halls. Rachel had her sons purchase her one immediately. The walkers had attractive plastic seats for resting when they grew tired of wheeling. They often parked themselves apart from the others, engrossed in the girl talk of old ladies.
They gossiped about the would-be friends who crowded them at their lunch table. The one with the gay grandson, the one who didn't wear a brassiere, the one who always ate two desserts. The one whose daughter had lymphoma, the one who wore girlish plastic barrettes and a stained yellow housecoat, the one with a car who would not let anyone ride. They held each other's knotty, misshapen hands. “We are peas in a pod, Rachel,” Jenny declared in her loud, crackled, cigarette-stained voice.
For fifteen months, they talked about their children, their grandchildren, their husbands, their lives. They spoke quickly, needing each other to know these things for reasons they did not acknowledge.
They celebrated their birthdays and ignored obituaries and emptied apartments. Rachel had a minor heart attack that kept her in the hospital for five days. She asked her sons to check on Jenny, to make sure her friend knew that she was coming back. While she was gone, Jenny died.
Rachel had not finished telling Jenny things. She did not care to tell anyone else. She put the useless rings in a drawer for her granddaughters to fight over, and waited.
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(Published in Pedestal Magazine, Spring 2010)
For my dad
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Oh this is so lovely. And sad. And just perfect, Lauren. I think the observation that these two friends felt compelled to tell each other their stories is a very keen, important, and moving one. I think you did your dad proud.
What I love about this story is that it's both sweet and bittersweet. You capture the depth and intimacy of Rachel and Jenny's relationship so perfectly, so tenderly, without making it overdone. And the ending, with its prescience and sorrow... Aim very high with this one.
"While she was gone, Jenny died.
Rachel had not finished telling Jenny things."
Sigh. These lines hurt. Faver.
kathy, roxane and jim:
thank you so much for reading and leaving such nice comments.
thanks especially, kathy, for the note about my dad. "rachel" is based on my grandmother, his mom. i wrote the story in her memory, as well. she is missed.
Just visited my Grandma in an indy living community in Florida called Wynmoor. She's turning 90 and made jokes about "green bananas." When an ambulance siren wailed past, she smiled and said "the music of Wynmoor."
Maybe instead of "While she was gone, Jenny died," you can make more immediate...something like, "One son returned, quickly mentioning Jenny's death."
Oh, and I really enjoyed this. Resonates.
You've done it! You've written a grandmother story that is not at all precious or sentimental. A great read. I especially love: "They celebrated their birthdays and ignored obituaries and emptied apartments." You get extra points for "arth-er-itis."
So beautiful.
David: thanks for your nice comment. your grandmother sounds like a hoot.
Katrina: what a wonderful compliment. i tried hard to keep it unprecious. grandmothers are not always precious and even death of a family member is not sentimental. i swear, every time there is a line/word i almost take out, people say they like it -- i came VERY close to losing arth-er-itis, but that was how my grandma really said it and i wanted to keep it. does that ever happen to you?
ravi: thanks. that means a lot. stop sucking on your shirt. (your comment still means a lot.)
Congratulations, Lauren. I echo all of the above, with the exception that I'd leave it as is. It's a beautiful, tender piece. So well done.
thanks ethel. this one really does mean a lot and your words and support are much appreciated.
ugh. lovely and sad. more sad.
"engrossed in the girl talk of old ladies."--perfect
well done, lb
thanks mel. glad you liked it.
One of the reasons I like this that hasn't been brought up yet: the anger. Anger is *so* hard to do right by in fiction -- it tends to either stay in too far, or spill out too much. But here, it seems like the anger is where it should be...and it wasn't an easy call, either.
one sentence in i said, i bet lauren would love aimee bender! and then i looked and you did. it was like magic! only... in reverse or something. anyway i liked how the story threatened to be fantasy right off the bat but then turned immediately into realism. also i like, structurally, how almost the whole story happens quietly in the last two paragraphs. that was nice. this story was good. and sad, which is another word for good.
erin: you always surprise me with the things you notice, sometimes things i don't even intend but see when you point them out. thank you for that.
ben: i do love aimee bender. and, like erin, you thought something of the story i didn't, probably because i don't really write fantasy but it's cool that you perceived that. thanks for reading it and for saying nice things.
...and waited. Choked me up. *