this never happened and yet i tell myself it did each morning
by Bobbi Lurie
i watch my mind not wanting to touch the vanished rusty notes remain objects of consciousness heaven and hell inside us each moment birds fly through mental speech dark garden rain olive green cool breath of betrayal siempre mixed with greed awakens jagged-edged-scary-people cruelty sadness tiny pieces of kindness such gratitude for sky unable to believe saying this never happened but remember memory outburst left alone siempre if only been clear to him hagp[p;; tra'k pk trlj [tri;u the wjp;e es'eroemde wotj wotj ammoe if only
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An amazing piece, Bobbi. I read this in Otoliths. Interesting work.
Dear Sam,
Thank you so much!
Clever, full of great images. Forces me to think. I enjoy writing that forces me to think.
Bobbi, i don't understand a word of this except as a visualised stream of words, where the first siempre hits my eye with some force. The second siempre appears to switch the text to bold - but on closer inspection it's probably the next two words 'if only' that activates the font change, since when those two words come again the font change switches back. consequently it seems you're doing some nifty private stuff here with the wordplay which is ok with me, since you after all are the real reader of this and i am just along as the gawking spectator. but i enjoy the gawk, as always.
Matthew,
Thank you for what you write. I really appreciate it.
Eamon,
I fear being the real reader--I can see how gawking might occur. I can't remember how I wrote this / what happened--I wrote it during a period when I was writing against poetry in the sense of not using stanzas, capitals, line breaks or sense. This is one of those pieces that could never be read aloud so gawking might be the only appropriate response. Thanks, Eamon, as always.
I agree with Sam--this is an amazing piece. You take plenty of risks and it all pays off!
Thank you, Darryl. The risk part is true. I wasn't sure about it at all.
Amazing and full. *