55 words #3
by Bobbi Lurie
Yes, my reaction was tentative. But absent of armor, filled with the wildness, the inner sensibility of brilliance. Such loneliness inside my failed life! Mute with longing, tired of trying. Such weathered fabrics...
I took myself out of it like a library book, turned the pages as if it was someone else's long drawn-out story.
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Phrasing that will hold. *
A recipe for living.
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Goodaliscious metaphor, that.
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Great piece. Strong writing, Bobbi - "I took myself out of it like a library book, turned the pages..."
So nicely done. . .favve
Beautiful writing. Such loveliness inside your lively imagination, no longer mute.
Love the parallel phrases.
Really liked the library book comparison.