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Yes keeps
falling
out
of my mouth
It started as a steady rainfall
yes...yes...yes
Each yes a drop, a pebble
falling into place
building a wall
or a bridge?
yes...
yes...
yes, and
they keep
coming,
falling
out
pouring now
between my lips
yes
yes
yes
.
.
.
and?
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Author's Note
Not sure on the line breaks with this one, feedback welcomed!
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I think this is perfect. Natural to read, every word falls right into place. I admire how the form mirrors the content. Love the ending "and?"-- both final and not. Fine work.
Regarding form and content: Love how it deflates.
Thank you, Dianne! I appreciate it more than is easily conveyed in a comment.
I like it. Sounds kind of sexy to me.*
I like this form. Works well here. Great way to close.
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