I may be through with you
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It may be over between us. After what I've been through; the lies of the canon, the lies of the religion, your kiss, your hard cock, your yin, my yang, I don't know I might be through with you. It might be over.
I might hate you.
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I was the drunk girl who passed out after licking peppermint schnapps off your dick, but you decided to fuck me anyway, I might hate you for that. When I woke up, you were inside me. I might hate you for that.
I might hate the 30 year old married man polishing his silver Corvette on a hot August afternoon. The girl you desire is 15 years old. That girl's arms are pinned against a rocky promontory as you enter her. If she moves one inch, she is dead. I might have to hate you for that, too.
The formal you, meaning all of you.
You owned a restaurant, I was a regular, when everybody left, you locked the door, pushed me against the bar, screamed, “I'm a cop and you're resisting arrest.” Remember how I had to talk you down?
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I might hate you for that.
The formal you, meaning all of you.
I've been trying to love you. It's not working.
Please send help.
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Wow, LA... this one chills me to the bone. I am so glad you write like this. Of course, I take it very personally, (of course), and it gives me permission to consider saying things I have been frightened to utter aloud, let alone share with others. Thank you.
Damn... the gray area rapes... how the hell do you write about those without it sounding strident or victim-y, or even angry? How the hell do you do that and retain such complexity?? This piece is really working on me, my dear...
I don't know what to say except it's in my head.
"The formal you, meaning all of you."
"Please send help."
I try to stay away from the brutal truth, sexual pieces. Even if it is symbolism. This one caught my attention. It reminds to do things for the pleasure, and not to impress. And to let others know what they can do to reach me.
Powerful stuff. Well worth the words that carve it.
Brutal and raw. Very nicely written.
thanks all, certainly a risk taking venture for me, I so appreciate having this venue to experiment with form AND content.
A clear and unsettling picture of what an unhealthy relationship can be and how people might feel trapped inside of one.
It evokes many regrets for this woman. Great writing.
Good piece, LA. Each section is very direct and works well. Especially like the way the piece closes. Good writing.*
thanks Sam this is my first foray into a darker, more personal realm in my work, always a risk, but I'm in that kind of a mood, thanks again. everyone thanks for the read and the comments, time will tell if I post more along these lines
Smartly written. I like the "I may" and "it might." The woman is claiming choice in the end.
Gritty and real. The prose couldn't be more in-your-face. Wonderful.
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