Notebooks

thank you Gessy. nice contrast and comfortable sharing.

I like these. These have a very straightforward style... for straightforward folks, I think. The mother's white gloves say so so much.

Beautiful story. So much achieved in such a brief time. I'm moved.

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"For eight years, she sewed buttons on vinyl trench-coats."

The tone is so quiet, unobtrusive that it lets the quiet reader see or lets the reader quiet to see.

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Someone once asked me where I thought my creativity came from. I had no reply. I suppose this is a fraction of an answer.

Thanks Warren, Steven, Matt, and Ann!

Thank you Gessy , a gifted storyteller and I'm pleased to read when you tell.

just wonderful, a slice of the past, perfectly rendered.*

The straight forward writing style (almost plain-speak) works so well with the stories you present, an homage. I was very moved by this work.
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Thanks Clark, Steven, and Susan! Taking a chance with these. A fact and fiction dance for sure.

I love this description of family legacy through notebooks. Fave*.

Well done..the juxtaposition of the notebooks and the final image of the daughter tracing the images is wonderful.

Thanks Gloria and Gary for reading and commenting!

It's true this is a chronicle of sorts but it also plays a larger role in my story collection. It's funny how pieces behave once taken out of context.

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I have to mention the last line is awesome, "time lost." re-reading.

But, the title needs help. I will perhaps suggest something tomorrow. oh and I like your new pic!

very tender piece Gessy.

Wonderfully straight ahead and tender. Unaffected and very moving.*

Beautiful focus. *

Thanks Clark for re-reading (goodness!).

Thanks Damion, John, and Beate for your thoughtful comments.

This is beautiful! My favorite sentence towards the end: "Sometimes he'd catch me sprawled on the linoleum floortracing and memorizing his old circuit drawings." — I came here from Sam's poem about his father, and this is just as tender and, because of the memory setting, edgier without bitterness. Remarkable.