When I was born, I was sleeping in my mother's eyes. I spied myself in the reflection---a mashed-up face of a rosy country pumpkin with a crooked nose, which stood nearly pinned to my soft cheek from the laborious, 18-hour passage through the birth canal. The women who helped me abandon the uneasiness of the womb stood guard in the room, petrified. All around spun a maelstrom of shadows and whispered words, and suddenly from the fog dislodged the sinuous, rubbery stem of my brother Vladi.
“You came in making such a racket, you woke up the animals,” he said and shook his head with content at the bloody, slimy pile of flesh that cooed and bubbled in the hammock made of old shirts and towels. “You look like a cracked wall with peeling paint.” The old gypsy pushed her way in, carrying burning incense in a golden censer held by three chains and a small, wooden cross. “They won't ring no bells for you, sonny” she said, “that's a done deal for sure. Bells no longer vaunt the birth of children, you little louse; they call out the birds of war now.” She swung the smoky censer at my face and began to chant. Someone said: blasphemy. But there were no priests to be found anywhere then. All the men were gone, even God. Only the women now stood in the archways of their gates, calling home their cows and goats in the evenings.
The gypsy elbowed her way through the others and crossed herself. “Don't worry,” she said. “In all the muddle I ripped out a piece of your brother's shirt. Don't pay no mind to his lip; you was angry when you checked in. Now let the old woman take care of you and cure you.” She lit the patch of cloth with an oil lamp and circled my head with smoke. “Sleep, sleep now. Go ahead. Be soothed by the heart of the earth. Sleep.”
The woman danced and whispered and then she chased away the dissipating ovals of smoke with her stale breath. “Run, arrows, leave, demons, forsake heartache and pain. Leave the head, the ears, run to other lands, other depths, let him rest in his own house.” She spat on the dirt floor three times. “Sleep, lamb, go now. Find your stillness, gather it inside your breast and cover your heart with it.”
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This is the intro to my forthcoming novel "The Sun Eaters." The setting is a village in WWII (and subsequently post-war Bucharest, during communist rule) Romania. The narrator is a boy with deafness in his left ear--a birth defect.
Wow. Spooky-visceral goodness.
great stuff. eerie and wonderful. reminds me of mark richard's fishboy.
LOVE this, Alex! " And she worked my ill-behaving nose toward the center of my face like a sculptor diligently molding the handle of a tea cup.." Can't wait to read more!
Thanks all...this is the opening page only. I hope to be able to bring you the entire thing, published, in 2013.
Found this poetic in all the right ways, particularly the first section, Alex. Nice writing.*
Fine work. *
Good writing, Alex. I like the piece.
THANK you Sam, Ann, and Joani.
"The women who helped me abandon the uneasiness of the womb stood guard in the room, petrified."
"All the men were gone, even God."
Good stuff. I'd keep reading.*
Thanks John.
Almost missed this one, glad I caught it. The imagery is fantastic, poetic. I feel like I'm being guided deeper into a profound work. Can't wait to read more.
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Thanks Matt; work is progressing incredibly well and I'm happy to say that the real good stuff takes off shortly after this intro. I aim to have this out sometime in 2013.
"She swung the smoky censer at my face and began to chant. Someone said: blasphemy. But there were no priests to be found anywhere then. All the men were gone, even God."
At this point in your piece, I'm hooked. The opening is quite strong...it transports us to this place, this time...makes us believe in this world. Good stuff, Alex!
Gessy,thanks. It takes off from this point on, but this is as much as I'm willing to post. I aim to have this making the rounds at the Big 6 initially...or seek out a foreign publisher; I hope that it sees the light of day by '13 but...out of my hands for now.
great beginning, Alex, and brave to publish this molecule of your own baby… I especially like the last sentence and the slow circles drawn around the child by the women.
oooh.. I like this very much.
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Susan, thank you so much.
Everyone's already said it. Great opening.
Gary, thank you for those kinds words.
Very much like the idea of posting the novel's intro, and an intriguing intro at that.
Thanks Kari. That's all I'm "leaking."
Alex, this is lush, the graceful touch of poetry in the strong narrative thrust. Makes me long for the rest of the novel.
Fave.
Robert, thank you; I am writing this book in this style, not the sparse, pared down way which most people know my fiction to read. Consequently, the progress is slow; I am usually quite happy with 400-600 words per session. They are difficult words, but they read very well and I'm left happy. It's laborious, but I wouldn't have it any other way.