Discussion → uhhh... eeeek!
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On Tuesday afternoon I line up with other petite brunette actresses, silently, our eyes underlined with dark liner.
This is Pounds Across America, now how to link, uh...
http://www.fictionaut.com/stories/meg-pokrass/pounds-across-america
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sorry to have said eeeek. anyway, i hope i did this right. this is a cool idea.
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I can see where this is going and the tension is there. Indeed, I want to know where we are going and what we are waiting for. A little something though, the word "line" is present three times in this sentence. Was this intentional?
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Hi Meg,
I'm going for the link to your story right now to read the rest of this. So, great first line!
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Thank you Andrew, good catch, it was intentional (i could lie!)
I know it's odd, but i wanted the piece to start out with the oppressive sense of a chorus line, or a line of cattle, and that is why i took that risk.
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