Discussion → first few lines of newly posted piece

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  Meg Pokrass

  Oct 05, 01:04pm

  
  

  The pool was four feet deep, and we bought it at Target half off. You could float on your back and think, “fun times are here,” because at least you weren't burning hot.

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  Andrew Bowen

  Oct 06, 01:09am

  
  

  I can tell this yarn is going to be subtle. There is an understanding that not all beginnings must be a literary punch to the gut. I think this is it, and while it doesn't have the flash of an action movie beginning, I'm seldom attracted to those anyway and would keep on reading.

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