Asking an Accomplished Poet Friend to Read My Poetry in a Starbucks at 2PM on a Thursday
by XXXX
Your usage of the English language
is awkward and passé—
reduce your language
until it is thick as syrup,
entire days into lines
while driving home.
Stop touching yourself so much.
That can't be good for you.
Read more poetry.
That's it.
I can't give you
any constructive advice.
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"entire days into lines
while driving home."
This is good advice, composing/polishing while driving = can't be distracted by the sight of words on the page, must depend entirely on sound and... taste.
Good friends tell it straight.
*
Yeah, quit jerkin' off so much...
;-)
reduce your language
until it is thick as syrup,
makes me want to touch myself
that can't be good for me. :/
A great sauce requires reduction.
Try it at 2 a.m.
not p.m.
makes a BIG difference!